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[محمد مطر المطرفي]

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وللقصيده اكثر من وجه واتمنا الا تفهم بالوجه الخاطي

من                                           دولة/ن                                            واعرف                                            نظام                                            الدولهالعز                                                             يصرخ                                                             والاماني                                                             حوله

إما                                                             تشيعنا                                                             واخذنا                                                              الكافيولا                                                              تنصرنا                                                               وجلنا                                                               جوله

البوم     يسجط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬والطويله     وكرهوالحر                                                             زوله                                                             مايشابه                                                             زوله

والي   يسمون   الحظاره    واقط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬ماتشبه                                                           فعول                                                            الرجال                                                            فعوله

والي                                            رشف                                             هالكاس                                             خلا                                             ثلجهخلا                                                             الحلال                                                             ولاهتنا                                                             بكحوله

غايب                                             مزاج                                             ولاعاد                                             هو                                              يطريولسانه                                                           المعسول                                                           يخلف                                                            قوله

والمنطلق  تصحيح  وضط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬السكرهانه       يــنام        ولايشيلهط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬وله

ولا                                            صرت                                            مابين                                            الخراب                                             الاصلحخل                                                             المغني                                                             يهتني                                                              بطبوله

يفرح                                             بها                                             ساعه                                             ويزعل                                             ساعهمختلفه                                                           افكاره                                                            وصايل                                                            صوله

إما                                              يغني                                              من                                              بنات                                              افكارهولا                                              يغني                                              من                                              بعض                                              منقوله

والشارط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬المليان    هم    وحسرهماينعرف                                                            صاحيه                                                            من                                                            مهبوله

مره                                              نقل                                              انه                                              امان/ن                                              وافرامرار                                                            مرعب                                                            لاقرينا                                                             اصوله

افكار                                                          مضطربه                                                          والاغرب                                                          شعبا/نيفخر                                                            بشي/ن                                                            مابعد                                                            وصلوله

كومبير                                                            مابين                                                            العيون                                                            براسكشوف/نط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬دل والعين الاخرى حوله

وحده                                                            تخيل                                                             للطريق                                                             وتقزهوعين/ن                                            تخيل                                            بس                                             تنضر                                             حوله

معادله                                                            سهله                                                             والاسهل                                                             حلهانك                                             تنول                                             تشوف                                              ماهو                                              ينوله

مثل                                            العرب                                            والغرب                                            في                                            هالعالموكثير   من   يكسبط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬لينا    بطوله

حنا                                            العرب                                            نشوف                                            درب/ن                                            واحدودروب      واجدط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬ننا      مقفوله

طولتها     واحس      صدط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬راسياشيا                                             تقال                                             وشي                                              منهو                                              يقوله

والكذب                                            اصدق                                            شي                                            لاكن                                             وقفبعض                                                           العرب                                                           شيصير                                                           لافطنوله

إما                                           بكلبشه                                            رحت                                            واخفو                                            شمسكولاط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬لى       هالميجنا        غنوله

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